La Gaviota Canta ***
Another in the series Las Gaviotas. Critique welcome.La Gaviota CantaLittle shorebirds scurry, pecking treatsThat the waves wash up in recurrent beatsWhile a youth, enthralled by the breakers...
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Dear Eric,The first thing now I look for in your poetry is your meter choice. I suspect you write mostly without paying attention to pre-scansion, trusting that you rarely hit a meter snag. Also, I...
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Merlin,Nope... I never caught anything like this with the fishing lines I used.I usually get so caught up in your meter and story that, if there are any bumps, I wouldn't notice or wouldn't care.Wayne
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Merlin - I enjoyed the tale but I'm having difficulty with the meter. Can you help me?jtb
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Hi Ron,After a couple of years writing verse, Ive arrived at the state where I no longer adhere to the rigidity of fixed meter. Reading different essays and opinions, it seems that strict meter can...
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Dear Merlin,After one reading I scanned it and have the notations here. Looking at the notations, I'd guess that I'd think it reads terribly but for me it didn't. Apparently it did read bumpy for...
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Thanks Ron,The subject of mixed or varied meter is vast. Different variations are out there, the one you mention is probably the most effective when using 2 distinct styles for 2 distinct subject...
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Merlin - I never received your e-mail for some reason or other. Could I ask you to try again? Thanks!jtb
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Yo, Merlin. This is up to your usual high standards. As usual, I bow before your poetic mastery. You da best, bubba. Laughing. Yours, DarkClick on pic for link to my new book
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Thanks Dark,You're too kind to me.+++++++++++I've revised the second-last verse to get a bit more cohesion, whadya think? There are 2 dangling participles there, but I believe I can get away with...
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Merlin,You've hit me at my weakest point ~ All the elements that make me swoon are included in this piece. Bravo and thanks for the read.AnnetteWhere your national flag flies proudly! "I cannot do to...
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I must admit... I do like the replacement verse better... I liked the old one too though... what do I know.Wayne
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Thanks to Annette & Wayne...SandDollar is a beachcomber moniker!I'm truly glad this has pleased you, but, I wasn't totally happy with my dangling that phrase and that gnawing would not pass.I've...
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